The thing I do appreciate about this is the way the hair is beginning to look. It feels like the hair color is almost there but you could definitely push highlights to make it really shine.

As for the form of the hair it comes off as stiff. I feel like there needs to be more light and loose strokes so that her hair doesn't look like it has been hardened by gel. Take a look at photographs of hair and how it usually falls over the shoulder. I'd also like to disagree with most of what was said in the previous critique. What you have IS a good start but there is room for improvement. Her eyes are uneven and there is no cast shadow in the whites of her eyes, thus it comes out looking very flat. If you look at your own eyes in the mirror you can find all sorts of highlights and cast shadows there. Also her eyes seem to be set too far apart with the angle you've given her.

And while the skin has a good start it also needs more highlights as well as shadows. Right now it just looks like you've given a thick, dark outline to her face and neck.

You have the beginnings of something that looks good but it is still in need of more work. Look at some real life references to see how the head is put together from that angle, draw from life. Even the artists doing anime and manga now got their start by drawing actual people.

Well I am a HUGE Manga Artist, I Love to draw Manga/Anime!! First off I LOVE the eyes! I Like where you put the light spots and I Like the hair and where the light cascades of of it! And the tone of the skin is very well done as well. You can really read her emotions and how she feels. And this is somthing that can be very hard, but you got it down perfectly!! From another Manga artist like your self I can say that this is Very Good! It dosnt look like any other type of Manga, buy you know its there, its your won stly, And i would keep drawing in this style! I am goiong to put you on my watch so that I can see the rest of your amazing art work!